mscherer
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Post by mscherer on May 25, 2012 9:22:47 GMT -5
Folks,
Need some help. Which logline presented below makes you want to run out and purchase a ticket to see the movie? If it is none, please let me know. If you have any suggestions to make any of them better, please let me know.
Thanks in advance.
Title: Face Me, Or Die
Genre: Thriller
Logline #1: A woman, who suffers from a condition that renders her unable to recognize faces, witnesses a murder, then struggles to identify the killer before she becomes his next victim.
Logline #2: A woman, who suffers from a condition that renders her unable to recognize faces, witnesses a murder, then, unwittingly, falls in love with the killer.
Logline #3: A woman, who suffers from a condition that renders her unable to recognize faces, witnesses a murder, then plays a deadly game of survival.
Keep Writing!
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Post by mbarrett on May 25, 2012 12:47:27 GMT -5
Hi Mike, I just watched a movie about face blindness about two months ago. It is almost exactly like the loglines above. I'm sending over the link - www.imdb.com/title/tt1536410/A woman suffering with face blindness is witness to a murder, soon realizes she can't trust anybody, leaving herself to find the killer and stop him. Just my two cents. Not sure if it helped at all or not. Hope you have a great weekend. Mark |
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Post by mbarrett on May 25, 2012 13:01:13 GMT -5
Just thinking about this again Mike. If you made it a comedy then it would fly. That would or could be a pretty funny comedy.
Or if you warped it in the sense that maybe all of what this woman see's is an illusion, maybe something brought on by what she did. Like, say she is acting this whole thing out and we get bits and pieces of what we think is a dream, but in reality it's her own thoughts of what she did. She's the killer and doesn't even know it.
Anyway - I'm rambling. Happy Friday.
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Post by clayjs on May 25, 2012 22:00:20 GMT -5
I'd probably go with Logline #1. I think it's most evocative. It gives us a hero, a villain and stakes. #3 isn't specific enough, and #2 doesn't really tell us what the hero is trying to accomplish or what's at stake.
I'd personally watch it, but it does sound like the Milla Jovovitch movie Mark pointed out is pretty close to it. To switch it up, how about a serial killer with face-blindness who is actually trying to kill someone specific (and therefore isn't really a serial killer) but can't recognize his intended victim.
P.S.--Is this intended for Scott Myers's 'The Quest'? Sounds like an incredible opportunity and I'd like to see one of the Shmucks get in on it. I'm putting some stuff together for it, myself.
Clay
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mscherer
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Post by mscherer on May 26, 2012 6:13:08 GMT -5
Thanks, guys, for the feedback. Much appreciated. I'll keep working out the kinks.
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Post by oz on Jun 3, 2012 0:15:46 GMT -5
Sorry so late in responding, Mike. I prefer #2. Don't think 1 or 3 is bad, #2 just gives me a more concrete visual of what to expect.
No matter which one you choose, the concept sounds great!
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Post by mybrainhurts on Jun 6, 2012 8:24:53 GMT -5
I would agree with Oz. #2 was my favorite as well.
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Post by churnage on Jun 7, 2012 18:21:46 GMT -5
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Post by lizzo1014 on Jan 20, 2013 16:31:46 GMT -5
I like #1. Most complete.
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Post by mybrainhurts on Jan 21, 2013 16:29:41 GMT -5
I like #2 or #3. Both have potential. #2 - sounds more like a comedy to me, #3 - tension filled action movie.
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