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Mar 31, 2013 3:14:29 GMT -5
Post by lizzo1014 on Mar 31, 2013 3:14:29 GMT -5
Hi everyone,
Having trouble crafting a logline from the below premise:
24-year-old TISH is deeply depressed after being dumped by her fiancé, English soccer star, JAMES. At a party organized by her actress friend, INDIA, Tish meets SUKI. Suki confides to Tish that she actually CUPID in humanoid form and that despite being on probation, she retains the power of see the past, present and future romantic partner of anyone she comes in contact with.
When Tish asks Suki/Cupid to reveal the identities of her all future lovers, Suki/Cupid reveals a name: HARRY COLE, who is the 19-year-old grandson of India's co-star. Determined not to repeat the same mistakes she made with James, the movie follows Tish's attempts to sabotage her relationship with Harry and prove "tis better to have loved and loss than to have loved at all" wrong.
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Mar 31, 2013 6:02:35 GMT -5
Post by mscherer on Mar 31, 2013 6:02:35 GMT -5
Liz,
A couple of questions.
First, is this a Rom-Com or a more serious, darker drama?
Second, if Suki/Cupid reveals to Tish that she will be romantically involved with Harry, why does Trish attempt to ‘...sabotage her relationship with Harry...’? Isn't she looking for love?
I look forward to your answers.
Keep Writing!
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Mar 31, 2013 11:33:15 GMT -5
Post by lizzo1014 on Mar 31, 2013 11:33:15 GMT -5
Hi Mike,
This is a romantic dramedy in the Annie Hall/Eternal Sunshine scheme. Tish is not looking for love after heartbreak. She is trying to avoid it at all cost as she doesn't want to have her heart broken ever again.
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Mar 31, 2013 14:41:30 GMT -5
Post by treeboy03 on Mar 31, 2013 14:41:30 GMT -5
Hi Liz,
After reading your synopsis, why don't you try something like this...?
"After a revealing visit from Cupid, a young woman attempts to sabotage her relationship with a future partner."
I'm not particularly good with loglines, but that's the best I could think of. I think the idea has some potential so long as it's handled right.
Hope this helps.
Good luck with it.
Dan
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Apr 1, 2013 8:37:03 GMT -5
Post by mscherer on Apr 1, 2013 8:37:03 GMT -5
Liz,
Here is my first SWAG at a logline....
A recently jilted woman, not looking for love after heartbreak, sabotages her relationships, unsure of the nature of love.
Keep Writing!
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Apr 2, 2013 18:52:13 GMT -5
Post by lizzo1014 on Apr 2, 2013 18:52:13 GMT -5
The jilted fiancee of a English soccer star pays Cupid to disclose her future romantic partners in hopes of sabotaging them to avoid falling in love.
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